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New dialog fic.

I need kid pictures of them. And by them I don't mean the freaks who played the younger them in the flashbacks, I mean either Dominic and Went (They aren't popular enough yet to have any out) or kids who look like them. I have that one of Mini!Michael from TWoP but nothing for Mini!Linc.

Also? Not crossposting until I get a title for this. This means help.

Title: Head-Butt Ain't Just a Verb
Status: Complete
Rating: PG
Fandom(s): Prison Break
Prompt: 49 - Deny
Characters: Michael, Lincoln, Mama!Scofield
Disclaimer: Not mine.
Summary: "Did you know that the ancient Egyptians used to shave their eyebrows off when their cats died?"

"Did you know that the ancient Egyptians used to shave their eyebrows off when their cats died?"

"What?"

"It was a sign of mourning. To show that they were sad."

"Okay?"

"Is that why you shaved your head; cause you were sad? Because it makes you look really ugly."

"Oh fuck you, you don't know shit. I look good."

"You look like someone glued half a butt to the back of your head."

"Hey, a hundred bucks is a hundred bucks."

"Derrick's not gonna give you the money."

"Is too."

"Is not."

"Is too."

"Is not."

"Is too."

"Is not."

"Is too."

"Is not."

"Is too."

"Is not, he don't even have his own cigarettes, he has to steal them from his brother."

"That's only 'cause he's not allowed to buy them."

"You're not gonna see the money."

"Shouldn't you be studying for your stupid spelling bee?"

"Nope, dropped out."

"What? Why the fuck did you do that?"

"Because I'm not gonna win."

"Course you ain't gonna win if you drop out stupid, why'd you drop out?"

"I can't beat Curtis Jacobs, he got bussed out to Arlington Heights last year and he got As in everything up there."

"He only got As because the teachers didn't want to get in trouble for flunking the only black kid there."

"I'm a tell mama on you Lincoln, that's racism and being racism is bad."

"The word is racist and it ain't racist if it's true. Curtis Jacobs is dumber than a sack of shit and he don't even know good enough to cheat off the smart kids in school."

"I'm still tellin' mama."

"Tell mama on me and you're gonna have to tell her you ain't studyin' like you supposedto."

"...Still shouldn't say it."

"Just because I shouldn't do it don't mean I ain't gonna."

"Mama's gonna beat your butt when she see what you did to your head."

"No she wont, it's my hair I can do what I want."

"She's gonna beat you."

"No she wont."

"Your butt's gonna be so red you ain't never gonna be able to sit down again."

"I'm a grown man. She can't do shit to me."

"Y'ain't no man, you're only thirteen and she's gonna kill you."

"She will not."

"Then why's she glaring at you like that right now?"

"What? --Mama! I can explain! Michael dropped out of the spelling bee!"

"Lincoln said black people are stupid!"

"Did not!"

"Did too!"

"Did not!"

"Did too!"

"Did n--"

"Enough! Go to your room right now; both of you!"

"But mama--"

"Lincoln Patrick Burrows if you ever want to see daylight again you'll get in your room right now."

"Yes ma'am."

"And if either of you two even lay a finger on each other I'm throwing the TV right off the balcony, understood?"

"Yes'm."

"Yes mama."

"Now march."

...

...

"...Is that my dish towel covered in hair? Lincoln!"

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"Now march."

*cracking up*

All Halfshell's fault. And have I mentioned how much I love Mama!Scofield?

Oh dude. I'm using the "deny" prompt on this because it's too perfect. Thought you might wanna know.

I love your dialogue fics. :0) You give such insight to the characters just by using their words.

Thanks for sharing! :0)

Dude these are so fun and they're like the only things I can churn out in a matter of minutes and not hate.

I'm glad you liked the fic! :D

Heee. :0)

Yeah when the dialogue flows it's aaaall good. Usually I fall totally for the dialogue in my fics (or parts of it) and absolutely hate the rest and if someone should point out the bit I love then I can be happy about it for days. *rolls eyes*

I'm so easy to please. *lol*

Also... I'll send the new family/dialogue centric A Life Half Lived chap to you ASAP. :0)

Yay! More ALHL! Woo!

"What? --Mama! I can explain! Michael dropped out of the spelling bee!"
"Lincoln said black people are stupid!"

This right here had me laughing out loud. Right now, Julia is quoting this fic and laughing hysterically.

I fucking love you!

This right here had me laughing out loud.

I admit, I may have channeled my family a bit there again. And you'd be laughing harder if you saw the mental image of this in my head.

Cause Linc's got his Mom's razors out (Cause he hasn't started stubbling yet) and her dish towel and a couple of band-aids on his head and he's all shirtless and baby-pudgy and Michael's sitting on the back of the toilet (Because he's not supposed to) playing with the gobs of shaving cream and hair.

Right now, Julia is quoting this fic and laughing hysterically.

I take it thatr means you two liked it?

I fucking love you!

Yay! I love you too and I'm glad you liked this, it only took like 20 minutes and that makes me friggen exstatic.

Yes, that means we liked it muchly!

Yay!

Love this, "You look like someone glued half a butt to the back of your head."
Heh!

Not loving the double-negatives. They're jarring, and I still don't find them right for Lincoln (yes, Fox writers, I AM talking to you).

Title... "The Naked Truth", "Head-Butt Ain't Just a Verb", "You Are So Gonna Get It", "Back When Lincoln Was Kind of Naive", "Glaring", "Beacon of Stupidity" (!), "Glowing With Gullibility", "Your Head Is Blinding Me", "I'm Telling Mom!"

Hey, they can't all be winners. ;)

Heh!

It's such a kid thing; I had to do it.

Not loving the double-negatives. They're jarring, and I still don't find them right for Lincoln (yes, Fox writers, I AM talking to you).

See, double-negatives are weird for me because half the time I don't even realize I'm using them. I totally had to reread this twice to notice (Cause my eyes just glide right over my stuff usually, which is obvious by all the typos). I tend to associate them with teenage boys I guess.

"Head-Butt Ain't Just a Verb"

And I think we've found a title!

"Head-Butt Ain't Just a Verb"
And I think we've found a title!
Whoo-hoo! You can obviously tell which part of the story really struck home with me.

AND it sucked in

alienmom, so Yay again!

How come I only get to use my cracked-out imagination to title other people's fics? :0

Whoo-hoo! You can obviously tell which part of the story really struck home with me.

Just a little.

AND it sucked in alienmom, so Yay again!

I take it that's a good thing?

How come I only get to use my cracked-out imagination to title other people's fics? :0

Because it's Murpy's Law?

AND it sucked in alienmom, so Yay again!
I take it that's a good thing?
Yes. Basically, the title made her read it. That's ALWAYS good in my book :D

Because it's Murpy's Law?
I'm pretty sure that's a typo, but now I'm getting a concept of "Urp" and "Murphy's Law" run together, which is... EVEN BETTER!

Please, someone, take away my caffeine...

Yes. Basically, the title made her read it. That's ALWAYS good in my book :D

Yay!

I'm pretty sure that's a typo, but now I'm getting a concept of "Urp" and "Murphy's Law" run together, which is... EVEN BETTER!

Dude. Murpy's Law. Newest of the New Laws.

*Pushes Mountain Dew towards you*

"You look like someone glued half a butt to the back of your head."

Loved this line. So funny! I have to say though that I can't imagine Linc and Michael calling their mom 'mama.' It just...doesn't sound like the word they'd use. But I nitpick too much. Nice job.

Thank you!

I admit that I couldn't really figure out what they'd call their Mom so I just kind went with "mama" because I figured if they're in trouble they might try and soften her up a bit (Like "I"m sorry Mommy, I love you!").

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change the name and i've said the exact same thing to my brats!! LOL

I'm almost positive that it's a universal thing, I've known both of my brothers full names since the younger one leanred how to sneak his bottle.

coming in there!

is what i said to my two youngest demons shared a room and there always seemed to be a rukus after they were sent in for punishment...you did it, no, you did, you did, you did...mommmmmmm!

Speaking as someone who was a rukus-maker I would apologize but, really? So much fun. :P

love it! the title drew me in. :)

"Lincoln Patrick Burrows if you ever want to see daylight again you'll get in your room right now."

change the name and i've said the exact same thing to my brats!! LOL

"And if either of you two even lay a finger on each other I'm coming in there!

is what i said to my two youngest demons shared a room and there always seemed to be a rukus after they were sent in for punishment...you did it, no, you did, you did, you did...mommmmmmm!

ah, the memories :-P

"Did you know that the ancient Egyptians used to shave their eyebrows off when their cats died?"

*giggles* no..

Cutecutecute xP

It's true, they totaly did. :P

Haha, I never even knew that they had shavers...

(ignore the fact that it's pure common sense since a lot of them had shaved heads...)

I kinda wanna say they used knives but I'm not sure.

...And now I'm curious.

Didn't they pluck their eyelashes out too?

I'm fast becoming a devotee of your dialogue fics... this was just so funny!

Didn't they pluck their eyelashes out too?

I think they did. I can't stop smiling because you knew that.

I'm fast becoming a devotee of your dialogue fics... this was just so funny!

Thank you! I have so much fun doing them it's kinda insane.

Awwww. If only it really ended that nicely in reality.

I know, huh?

Hee, very cute. I have to agree with halfshell, I didn't love the double negatives (more from Michael than Lin, 'cause I have trouble picturing Michael speaking that way even at a young age), but other than that - way cute, especially Michael marking fun of Linc's assy hair-cut. I love your dialogue fics!

Thanks sweetie, I'm glad you liked this! And yeah, the double negs are weird; I have to remember to look out for them.

Heehee, soo cute.

I love this line:
Is that why you shaved your head; cause you were sad? Because it makes you look really ugly.
because it establishes the tone and setting of the piece simply and hilariously.

I also love how Linc calls Michael's spelling bee stupid, and calls him stupid for dropping out of it, and he's not actually being an ass. He's actually being a supportive big brother, showing interest in his Michael's life and encouraging him to better himself.

I also adore the last line. Poor Mamascofield had her hands full.

Heehee, soo cute.

Thank you!

I love this line: [...] because it establishes the tone and setting of the piece simply and hilariously.

Thank you, I was really trying to get that whole "annoying little brother, annoying big brother" thing going right.

I also love how Linc calls Michael's spelling bee stupid, and calls him stupid for dropping out of it, and he's not actually being an ass. He's actually being a supportive big brother, showing interest in his Michael's life and encouraging him to better himself.

That's a very family sort of thing to do, huh? It's like, Lincoln can make fun of Michael and call him names all he wants because that's his little brother but at the same time that's his little brother so they both know he only kinda means them.

I also adore the last line. Poor Mamascofield had her hands full.

Poor woman woulda probably ended up in the loony bin if she'd've lived, they would've driven her right outside her mind.

I absolutely adored this! I love reading about them as kids. I'm not sure what it is, but maybe just their cuteness!

Sometimes, I wish the writers of PB would bring their mother back, with some conspiracy that maybe The Company kidnapped her. I hate the thought of her not being alive!

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed this!

What I'd really like to see? Is a flashback with Mama Scofield. And possibly kids who look even a little like Michael and Linc.

That would be totally cool... I sort of imagine her to be like Mrs Doubtfire, but not so funny...
I sent you an email to your livejournal address... not sure if you got it. It's regarding beta-ing :)

Yeah just got the email, gonna check it right soon here.

ROFLOL! :D

I love your all-dialogue ones. XD

All-dialogue is surprisingly fun to write, a little hard at times, but fun.

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